Talk:A Pawn of Fear/@comment-28939893-20161002035632

I like this fairly well thus far- introduces a new Fear with a cool concept, jumps straight into the weirdness instead of masquerading (no pun intended) as a real blog. (Admittedly my blog does that too, but once things really get started it'll become a full-on apocalypse. And this is my first Fearblog, so I'm just trying things out.)

But the problem is with "An Hourglass Counting Down." As soon as a character in the story itself thought "how cliche," I instantly shook my head. (Mentally, I think. Can't really remember.) Anyways, your character shouldn't have to lampshade the clichedness for anything but humor. Even then it should be executed well. But if it's a dramatic story, then you should probably change the dialogue instead of lampshading.