Thread:Dr0Shadow/@comment-1988716-20141106110347/@comment-9289481-20141107013928

Before reading: Ohh Crum I'm so nervous.

Half way through reading: are you trying to make the gift sound weird, perverted, and silly?

After reading: what. Okay, some problems, some questions, and some things you might want to acknowledge;

(oh my my hands are sweating shot I'm so startled)

The Problems note: these are my personal opinions. You do know have to fallow them


 * you made the last gift sound like some sort of eldritch salesman...or that was jack hijacking it's manifestation/ it's own form.

The Questions:
 * Was ten speed and the last gift sharing control there?
 * the Fears gave the last gift to Rael as a present (I see what you did there, last gift, fare well present, well played mister dooling). So the Fears were just saving that for him?

The Stuff you should know:
 * i plan to have the last gift's manifestations be based upon the forms that were forced upon sinners in classical mythology (i.e. The spider for aracnie)
 * I also plan for it to target "sinners" only, attempting to contain them, consuming them in the process. It may try to active thus by tempting then to open it while it disguise itself as a normal unmarked container, then dragging them in for consumption, or outright chases them as one of its manifestations
 * these manifestations are linked to the gifts body, so that can't go far form it, like an umbilical cord. This means that it could manifest it around its body, and be carried around (for example, a spider manifestation would carry it in its abdomen, although it would have to be an abnormally large spider).

I'm so amazed at it. Good lord, that was brilliant. Thank you so much, you brilliant brit.