User blog comment:LilPotato/The Book of Melody/@comment-9289481-20141215134423

That fist chapter is confusing. Please tell Owen of my following suggestions for the first book:

One: Make that first chapter a bit more clear.

Two: Rename the first chapter something besides genesis, for we don't want any flame wars. Try a different language, like Finnish. OGTRIB used that language for the use for the names of the Fears that enter the Ceesvere at act iv. I would love to write for this, but where do we submit it?